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Jay Douglas's avatar

Excellent prose. Great sense of place and snappy dialogue that keeps everything moving while adding to the story. That's a hard thing to do; some writers fail at it miserably, but your writing excels where dialogue is concerned.

Looking forward to the next chapter!

RADAR's avatar

Thank you my brother!

Chet Sandberg's avatar

I can give edits to the second half of the chapter, too (didn’t get). I just haven’t had the time recently.

RADAR's avatar

by all means man. I like what your doin